Aforementioned smaller crop. I like this version better because you can see their faces, especially Ben’s big old doofy grin, which is my favourite part of this piece hands down. Also a rare glimpse of Jonathan looking somewhat pleasant, shock and awe!
I agree! The cropped version looks much better. Mainly because it makes the composition better. In the first version you had way too much “space” to the left, and you placed one of the character in the centre (a big no-no when it comes to composition is to place key objects in the centre of the image).
Also, something bothers me when it comes to the horizon line here, I think you have unintenitonally created a tangent when the vanishing point “merge” with the front characters sides. You could easily fix this by either place the horizon line a bit farther down or change the position of the right arm, making it visible and breaks the tangent-effect.
I think you could’ve added more objects here to establish more lightsource. Some streetlights along the road would work better for a backlight. The citylights in the background is theoretically too far away to alone create a backlight on the characters.
I also think it would create a nice contrast if you mad the buildings much darker - almost black - and just let the lit windows pop out. It often looks more natural and is easier to draw.
And the buildings to the left are not straight, even though the earth is round or a building is built on a hill, you always aim to make it as straight as possible to live in.
As a final protip, I can sugget that you draw some grass and vegetation popping out from the sides of the road instead of one straight line, it will give the background more “flesh” and appear a bit more natural. You don’t need to be super-detailed with this, just drawing silhouettes of plants and grass. It will make the “transition” betwen grass and road feel much more natural.